| One essential standard for living is being able to be happy. What is happiness? Happiness is something that lies in the deepest parts of our bodies. It resides in all of us. Happiness can be found in many different forms. It doesn't stay far away. It always stays with us. Then we will find some causes of happiness.
Sometimes we can feel happiness from materials. For examples I want to buy the clothes. It looks nice. I really like it. In this situation if I can't buy the clothes, maybe my feeling will be not good. But if I can buy the clothes, I will really happy. My happiness came from buying clothes. And some people have been under a lot of stress then they are wants to eat some sweet food. Sweet foods make them happy. Like this materials give some happiness to people.
Also we can feel happiness from a cultural life. Watching movie will be giving happiness to you. When you have rest, funny programs broadcast in television. You are feelings will be very fine. Journey brings happiness either. We can find many precious things while traveling and that experience made us to be happy.
Other people feel a sense of accomplishment. So they study very hard cause they want to get the prize. Get the prizes makes them happy, it is another method to catch the happiness. Suddenly you think that you want to learn something. If you decide to learn, learning brings happiness to you. You will be happy by learning. Like this sometime accomplishment makes you happy.
People feel happiness from various things. Some people can be found happiness from material things. Any people can be found happiness from a cultural life. And others feel happiness from a sense of accomplishment. Happiness exists in a variety of ways. So we have to be found our happiness way and enjoy our life.
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Saturday, April 5, 2014
Sunbo Hwang/First Draft(p.75)/Tuesday 9AM
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I couldn't find a general thesis about the causes and effect in the introduction.
ReplyDeleteEach body paragraph contains a topic sentence that defines a specific cause.
The causes explain in a logical way.
The writer uses connecters to show cause and effect.
The conclusion restates the cause.
1. There is no general thesis about the cause and effect in your introduction. Maybe..Happiness can be found in different forms~Then we will find some causes of happiness.
ReplyDelete2. Every body paragraph has its topic sentence that defines a specific cause.
3. You explain the causes in a logical way
4. The writer uses connecters to show cause and effect.
5. The conclusion restates the causes.
6. evaluation. people feel happiness from various things.
One essential standard for living is being able to be happy. Happiness is something that lies in the deepest parts of our bodies. It resides in all of us. We think that Happiness is staying some special spot. But it doesn’t. Happiness can be found in many different forms. It doesn’t stay far away. It always stays with us. Then we will find some causes of happiness from daily life.
ReplyDeleteSometimes we can feel happiness from materials. For examples I want to buy the clothes. It looks nice. I really like it. In this situation if I can’t buy the clothes, maybe my feeling will be not good. But if I can buy the clothes, I will really happy. My happiness came from buying clothes. And some people have been under a lot of stress then they are wants to eat some sweet food. Sweet foods make them happy. Like this materials give some happiness to people.
Also we can feel happiness from a cultural life. Watching movie will be giving happiness to you. When you have rest, funny programs broadcast in television. You are feelings will be very fine. Journey brings happiness either. We can find many precious things while traveling and that experience made us to be happy.
Other people feel a sense of accomplishment. For examples they study very hard cause they want to get the prize. Get the prizes makes them happy, it is another method to catch the happiness. Suddenly you think that you want to learn something. If you decide to learn, learning brings happiness to you. You will be happy by learning. Like this sometime accomplishment makes you happy.
As you see happiness is not stay from special spot. People feel happiness from various things. Some people can be found happiness from material things. Any people can be found happiness from a cultural life. And others feel happiness from a sense of accomplishment. It stayed every moment. It’s so simple. Happiness exists in a variety of ways. You can find happiness easily. Every moment have happiness. So if you want to happiness, just turn around. Then you will find it.