A sound mind in a sound body
201300058 Kang yoonhae
What do you think of the main cause of one's happiness? In my belief, keeping a healthy body is most required as humans are very sensitive to their physical conditions. Everyone must have had an experience of feeling depressed and gloomy because of sickness. In other words, health can be a foundation of happiness. Therefore, for a satisfying life specific efforts are essential to make best body conditions: good sleep, nutritious food and working out.
To begin with, human are definitely need of fine quality of sleep. We cannot survive without sleeping. To be specific, according to the experts, taking enough hours of sleep decreases stress level which relates to a strengthen of one's immune system. During sleeping, positive hormones come out and circulate the body. These hormones prevent secretion of stress hormones such as cortisol or histamine. With this prevention people became less stressed and have a high level of immunity. This is because high level of stress weakens immunity system as a steroid hormone, glucocorticoid that stimulates brain and makes human body not to provide enough number of antibody and white blood cells. In other words, our immune systems are less disturbed if we don't get stressed. Therefore, sleeping beneficially is related to physical health and moreover, a happiness.
Furthermore, nutritious food directly relates to physical health. Human body needs nutrition. Every ingredients of our body from head to toe are sustained by food we eat every day. In addition, every organs and cells wants different nutrition. For example, our skin and hair needs protein to keep its shape. Carbohydrates help us move and vitamins are needed not only to disassemble other nutrition but also to increase immune system. As every nutrition work in different body parts, it is important to eat various kinds of food and fulfill our body with various kinds of nutrition. Consequently, for a healthy body we must make sure our menu to be nutritious.
Last but not least, regularly exercising is beneficial for physical health. Exercise dissembles our fat which can cause diabetes. As a lot of complications follow after diabetes, exercising is crucial for health. In addition, exercising helps our body to release our stress and give positive effects to our immune system. This is because during exercising, our body secretes adrenalin and other positive hormones that reduce stress. It directly relates to strengthen of our immune system as stress gives critical impact on immunity by destroying antibodies and white blood cells. Therefore, people need to exercise routinely to make one's body fit.
Everyone wants to live a life of contentment. Although there are many causes of happiness such as physical, material or even mental cause. Above all, having a physical health is most important. People are easily distracted by body conditions and also we cannot enjoy any of our hobby or favorite works without health. Therefore, taking a good night sleep, supplying nutritious food and exercising regularly are required for our happiness as those helps our body fit. Where a sound body stays, a sound mind will follow on.
TO: Kang Yoonhae
ReplyDeleteFROM: KIM HAYOON
Hi. You think that happiness can be acheived through a sound body. I like your idea, especially your title.
The use of connecting words were amazing.
In your first body paragraph, "According to the experts, taking enough hours~"
can be changed into: "According to experts, having enough sleep decreases~"
This will make your sentence more clear and concise.
Great essay.
Good from the beginning you wrote the title of the writting and it looks good. Although you forget to put comma at the "Therefore, for a satisfying life specific efforts", you made your writing very concrete by smalling your writting only into health. Your bodies contains good contents that matches what you want to say and your conclusion also matches well. But I thinkt that we don't need conclusions in every end of the sentence. I doubt that is not really clear...it is your mind to erase it but i think that erase some of the last sentece of the body paragraph will be more natural.
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What do you think of the main cause of one’s happiness? In my belief, keeping a healthy body is most required as humans are very sensitive to their physical conditions. Everyone must have had an experience of feeling depressed and gloomy because of sickness. In other words, health can be a foundation of happiness. Therefore, for a satisfying life, specific efforts are essential to make best body conditions: good sleep, nutritious food and exercise.
To begin with, human are definitely need of fine quality of sleep. We cannot survive without sleeping. To be specific, according to experts, having enough sleep decreases stress level which relates to a strengthen of one’s immune system. During sleeping, positive hormones come out and circulate the body. These hormones prevent secretion of stress hormones such as cortisol or histamine. With this prevention people become less stressed and have a high level of immunity. This is because high level of stress weakens immunity system as a steroid hormone, glucocorticoid, that stimulates brain and makes human body not to provide enough numbers of antibodies and white blood cells. In other words, our immune systems are less disturbed if we don’t get stressed. Therefore, sleeping beneficially is related to physical health and moreover, a happiness.
Furthermore, nutritious food directly relates to physical health. Human body needs nutrition. Every ingredients of our body from head to toe are sustained by food we eat every day. In addition, every organ and cell wants different nutrition. For example, our skin and hair needs protein to keep its shape. Carbohydrates help us to move and vitamins are needed not only to disassemble other nutrition but also to increase immune system. As every nutrition work in different body parts, it is important to eat various kinds of food and fulfill our body with variety kinds of nutrition. Consequently, for a healthy body we must make sure our menu to be nutritious.
Last but not least, working out regularly is beneficial for our physical health. Exercise dissembles our fat which can cause diabetes. As a lot of complications are followed after diabetes, exercising is crucial for health. In addition, exercising helps our body to release stress and give positive effects to our immune system. This is because during exercising, our body secretes adrenalin and other positive hormones that reduce stress. It directly relates to strengthen of our immune system as stress gives critical impact on immunity by destroying antibodies and white blood cells. Therefore, people need to exercise routinely to make one’s body fit.
Everyone wants to live a life of contentment. Although there are many causes of happiness such as physical, material or even mental cause. Above all, having a physical health is most important. People are easily distracted by body conditions and also we cannot enjoy any of our hobby or favorite works without health. Therefore, taking a good night sleep, supplying nutritious food and exercising regularly are required for our happiness as those helps our body fit. Where a sound body stays, a sound mind will follow on.
Happiness & Health
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201300058 Kang yoonhae
How many patients who are suffering from disease can be truly happy? In my belief, only small number of patients can be full of contentments. Humans are very sensitive to their physical conditions, therefore, it is very important to keep a health body for being happy. Everyone must have had an experience of feeling depressed and gloomy because of sickness. In other words, health can be a foundation of happiness. Therefore, for a satisfying life, specific efforts are essential to make best body conditions: good sleep, nutritious food and exercise.
To begin with, human are definitely need of a fine quality of sleep. Everyone must have an experience of getting more tired after staying awake for a whole night. Moreover, tired body exposes a person to more stress. For example, during exam period I can’t get enough sleep hours because I have to prepare for tests. Those periods are the time that I find myself of hard to control my emotions because of my terrible body condition for lack of sleep. Sleeping refreshes not only people’s body conditions but also mental conditions. If people cannot get enough sleep, their mental became lack of time to recover and easily damaged. Human cannot survive without sleeping. Therefore, sleeping beneficially is related to physical health and moreover, a happiness.
Furthermore, nutritious food directly relates to physical health and happiness. Human body needs nutrition. Every ingredients of our body from head to toe are sustained by food we eat every day. In addition, every organ and cell wants different nutrition. For example, our skin and hair needs protein to keep its shape. Carbohydrates help us to move and vitamins are needed not only to disassemble other nutrition but also to increase immune system. It is important to eat various kinds of food and fulfill our body with variety kinds of nutrition because every nutrition works in different body parts. Consequently, absorbing sufficient amount of nutritions is helpful to sustaining both physical and mental contentment.
Last but not least, working out regularly is beneficial for happy life. Exercise dissembles our fat which can cause diabetes. Lots of complications are followed after diabetes which will consequetly damage our body and inner conditions. In addition, exercising helps our body to release stress and give positive effects to our immune system. This is because during exercising, our body secretes positive hormones that reduce stress. It directly relates to strengthen of our immune system as stress gives critical impact on immunity by destroying antibodies and white blood cells. Consequently, people need to exercise routinely to make one’s body fit.
Everyone wants to live a life of contentment. Although there are many causes of happiness such as physical, material or even mental cause. Above all, having a physical health is most important. People are easily distracted by body conditions and also we cannot enjoy any of our hobby or favorite works without health. Therefore, taking a good night sleep, supplying nutritious food and exercising regularly are required for our happiness as those helps our body fit. Where a sound body stays, a sound mind follows.