Many people want to be happy. There are so many kind of happiness. But it is too hard for people to answer when they are asked how to be a happy? Many people have their own answer about the happiness. Some can say much money can make them happy others can say getting a prize can make them happy. But in my opinion, there are 3 basics for cause of happiness and they are the most essential. These 3 causes are important so it would be better
First, you become happy when you find out your talent. Most people want to find out what their talent is and work with that talent. They became happy when they work what they do well and they love to do. So find out what you want to do.
In addition, physically and mentally relax give you happiness. Happiness comes from your mind. It is not from outside. Many people just want happiness at their front so they only harsh their body and mind. These kind of things are eventually becoming far from the happiness. Although the method of being happiness can come from the outside, the most important thing for happiness is in your mind. So became relax. If you become mentally or physically stable, finding happiness will be easier.
Moreover, accomplish from the small thing and have a concrete plan about thing. If you say 'I'll be happy if I got lots of money.' How much money are lots of money? It is hard to now. But you can start with small one. For example, if you have 5,000 than you can be happy if you earn 30000, after that you can wish 100000. Like this type, you can be continuously happy. So make your plan very concrete. The more concrete you are the more happier you will be.
Happy is not far from us. But to be a happy can take lots of time. Also there are lots of happiness but as I mentioned earlier, there are basic happiness and that is the find out your talent, physical and mental relax, and accomplish from the small thing and concrete plan about the happiness plan.
1. I found the cause and effect sentence but it was not your thesis about the happiness. I couldn’t find the cause and effect thesis.
ReplyDelete2. Each paragraph contains a topic sentence that defines a specific cause.
3. It looked like that the causes were nearly logical.
4. You barely used connectors to show cause and effect.
5. Your conclusion restates the causes that was introduced in the introduction.
6. I think the sentence “Happy is not far from us” is an evaluation.
From Unbae Kwon To Sejong Lee
ReplyDelete1. the cause and effect sentence is exsist. but the problem is there are so many introduction sentence. so it's confuse to find what is really thesis.
2. Each body paragraph contains a topic sentence defining a specific cause.
3. I think your causes are explained in a logical way.
4. It looks like you didn't use many connectors to to show cause and effect
5. The conclusion doesn't restate the causes.
6. I could find many important things, but the problems is there are so many important things
I think you are a good writher, but if you try to fix your grammartical erroor and to have unity, it would be better
Do not find answer for being happy.
ReplyDeleteEverybody wants to be happy and they all want to know how to be happy. But I want to ask why do you want to be happy? There is so much ways to be happy. But are we really become happy if we found the way to be happy and achieve it? I disagree from this idea. Happiness can be planned to achieve it. It just comes randomly after you accomplish some kind of achievement.
Finding pleasure makes you more stressful. So how can I be happy? First stress comes from here. To define how can be happy, you have to imagine yourself and mostly they are not in your real world. As a result, you find out that your present circumstance is not makes you happy and you have to work out to make your situation to be happy. Finally you end with working or studying hard having lots of stress from the pressure to be happy.
Also, happiness is the result not the purpose. Many people who lived before us tried to be happy, but are everybody really became happy after they finished their plan? Mostly they didn’t. Some people wants more after they achieved to be happy, mostly ended with tragedy. Also there is another case that you achieved the goal to be happy, but the circumstance already changed.
As a result, when you finding your way to be happy, you find yourself you are away from the happiness. So don’t force to find how to be happy. Do what you have to do now. Solve the problem you front now, rather than finding happiness somewhere away from the galaxy.
Cause of happiness
ReplyDeleteDo you really think that pleasure is out there?
201002416 Lee Sejong
Everybody wants to be happy and they all want to know how to be a happy person. But ask yourself why do you want to be happy? There are so much ways to be happy. But are they really make you become happy if you found that plan? To tell the truth, probably it won’t. Happiness cannot be planned to achieve it. It just comes randomly after you accomplish some kind of achievement.
Finding pleasure makes you more stressful. Why? First stress comes from inside of you. As the way to become happy, mostly you have to imagine yourself usually not in the real world. Most will come from your imagine that is far away from the reality. As a result, you find out that your present circumstance will not makes you happy and you have to work out to make your situation to be happy. Eventually you end with resulting to be work or study hard which makes having lots of stress from the pressure to be happy.
Also, happiness is the result not the purpose. Many people who had lived before our age tried to be happy, but is everybody really become happy after they finished their plan? Mostly they didn’t. Some people wants more after they achieved to be happy, mostly ended with tragedy. There are too much examples, like Napoleon, who became monarch of the Europe but he didn’t stop conquering because whenever he succeeded conquering he want more to be a happy and eventually he tried to conquer Russia, but he failed and died poorly in a little island. Also there is another case that you achieved the goal to be happy, but the circumstance already changed. In this case, people eventually became happy didn’t thought that they became happy.
Finally, then where does the happiness come from? It comes from present. Do what you have to do in front of you. Don’t put away things away that you have to do it because you have to do it eventually. After you did all the things facing with you, you can look backward finding out yourself did lots of things and that accomplishment help you make live happier.
As a result, when you finding your way to be happy, you find yourself you are away from the happiness. Look for a solution to become happy make you to rethink your current life eventually led to stress. Also already lots of people tried to be happy resulted in far from happiness. So don’t force to find the happiness. Do what you have to do now. Solve the problem you front now, rather than finding happiness somewhere away from the galaxy. It is sure that doing such things might give you more pleasure.