<Drink smart-drinking tips for 2014 freshmen>
201300510 KIM HAYOON
New school year means meeting new people, and attending drinking parties is one way of meeting new people. Everyone is excited to see new faces, but for some freshmen, drinking parties can be a burden. Especially for first-time drinkers and poor-drinkers, alcoholic beverage itself is a nightmare because they are afraid of drinking too much. However, you can overcome the fear of heavy drinking by remembering these three tips: eat something before and during drinking, drink water and drink slow.
First, fill up your stomach before and during drinking. If you start drinking on an empty stomach, not only the alcohol absorption rate goes up but the blood alcohol level skyrockets. Therefore, it is best to have a meal before you start drinking. However, there are some occasions when you do not have enough time to fill up your stomach. If this is the case, focus on the side dishes. Snacks with high dietary fiber such as fruit and salad are the ideal side dishes. Try to avoid salty, spicy snacks such as French fries because they only make you drink more.
Another method you can use is to drink plenty of water. This is extremely useful when you do not have time to eat before drinking and there is not much to eat as side dishes. When water enters your stomach, it dilutes alcohol and makes you feel full, so the actual consumption of alcohol decreases. I have seen many freshmen take hangover-relief-energy drinks instead of water. Nevertheless, a research in 2010 showed that the effect of these drinks cannot be trusted. Only water can prevent your body from dehydration, thus making it the number one hangover-relief drink.
Drinking slow can also be an effective measure you can take from getting drunk. I know this can be hard for Korean freshmen because Korean drinking culture demands people to drink fast. However, if you drink bottoms up every time, the amount of alcohol that is delivered to the brain cell increases and the liver loses the ability to digest alcohol. So if you care about your body, try to divide drinking. Furthermore, talking while drinking can really help. It is known that 10% of the alcoholic ingredient is discharged through breathing, eventually making you drink slower.
Drinking cannot be separated from college students these days. It is a way to make friends, a place to show oneself, and many more. Although drinking parties can be fun, it is important to know your limits and never go too far. If you want to enjoy your time at the party and want to be remembered as a well-mannered freshmen, make sure that you do not drink on an empty stomach, continuously drink water and drink slow. As the Korean saying goes, 'too much is as bad as too little'.
Peer Feedback Sheet
ReplyDeleteTo Sujin Park / From Kang yoonhae / Assignment 2014
1. What I like about this piece of writing is
it is an interesting subject.
2. Your main point seems to be
Guidline of drinking for freshman and first-time drinkers.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful:
words or lines:
1) Nevertheless, a research in 2010 showed that the effect of these drinks cannot be trusted.
2) Only water can prevent your body from dehydration, thus making it the number one hangover-relief drink
3) Drinking cannot be separated from college students these days.
I like them because :
1) You seem to have a preparation before writing this essay.
2) I like your expression - number one hangover-relief drink.
3) It is a good starting of conclusion.
4. Somethings aren't clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved (meaning not clearly supporting points missing, order seems mixed up, writing not lively):
lines or parts ------> Need improving because
1) Therefore, it is best to have a large meal before you start drinking can be more lively.
2,3) Other parts and lines are good.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is giving more examples. That can make your writing to be more interesting. I really enjoyed reading your essay and thanks to your great tips!
Peer Feedback Sheet
ReplyDeleteTo Kim Hayoon From Hoo Hwi Assignment 2014
1. What I like about this piece of writing firstly your topic is interesting and useful. Then you made the article clear by using the signpost.
2. Your main point seems to be some drinking tips for freshman in 2014.
3. These particular words or lines struck me as powerful!
Words or lines I like them because
Everyone is excited to see new faces,but… changed the hook into introduction naturually
Fill up your stomach before drinking very clear tip for readers to understand
Method, measure… same meaning but different words
5. Some things aren’t clear to me. These lines or parts could be improved
Lines or parts need improving because
A place to show oneself, and many more. Drinking is a way to show yourself, much more.
6. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is
I really appreciate your writing style but if you can check your grammar again, like “drinking slow” into “drinking slowly”, your article will be perfect.
To Hayoon Kim from Byungwook Kim Assignment (201300476 EIT)
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is the information in it might come in handy.
2. Your main point seems to be three ways of saving yourself from heavy drinkin.
3. . If you start drinking on an empty stomach, not only the alcohol absorption rate goes up but the blood alcohol level skyrockets – I liked this line because the word ‘skyrocket’ was very fun.
4. Your thesis was about overcoming the fear of heavy drinking, but your body paragraphs are all about ways you can brace yourself from heavy drinking. There is nothing about fear.
5. The one change you could make that would make the biggest improvement in this piece of writing is to avoid using basic words and to start using more sophisticated level of vocabulary.