Intellectual property
201300058 Kang yoonhae
In these days, through a website such as torrent, people can freely share movies and music. However, this is an illegal behavior as they don't pay for having those movies and music. In my opinion, people who copies intellectual properties must be considered as a thief. This is because it damages supplier's finance and lowers motivation of producers. In addition, possibilities of intellectual gap which is an important assertion of opposite site can be tolerated by differently adjusting prices.
To begin with, illegally copying intellectual product directly damages financial means of the producer. As physical workers earn money by selling their physical products, intellectual producers also have rights to get proper benefit of producing. For example, farmers sell crops and earn money. If a person illegally takes crops and spread them to other people, this behavior is considered as burglary. In other words, copying and spreading intellectual property can be translated into stealing one's financial products.
Furthermore, intellectual suppliers will lose their motivation if they cannot get proper prices for their work. To advance quality of our culture, developing intellectual products is essential. Movies, novels, music are all included in intellectual property. For example, if a movie is copied and spread the profit of producing a movie will be decreased. The movie producers will be less motivated if their masterpiece is not properly estimated. They naturally got an impression of the audiences consider the movie as not worth enough to go theater. This will relate to of thinking the movie producer's outcome is not respected by the society. After they are de-motivated, they will give less effort to make incredible movies and this will bring depression of movie industries and cultures.
Last but not least, intellectual gaps followed by capital status can be overcame by adjusting prices flexibly. One of the biggest reason of against intellectual property is it will elevate intellectual gaps among societies. As people have to buy products such as movies and music, the poor cannot enjoy them as they don't have enough capitol. However, by flexibly managing prices everyone can afford proper cost of the product. To be specific, children and students who don't have an financial ability can enjoy intellectual products in relatively low prices. However, adults especially who earn lots of money will have to pay higher costs.
Intellectual property must be respected by society. Not just for proper payment of workers' effort but also for social benefits, illegally copying and spreading of products must be eliminated. In addition, by flexibly adjusting costs of products everyone will have enjoyment and benefits of product. Therefore, I strongly believe that copying one's intellectual property must be considered as stealing and we have to stop this circumstance.
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ReplyDelete1. yes it does have 5 paragraph
2. yes, But it is seperated into 2 sentence. It would be better to change it into 1 sentence
3. Yes, It does have topic sentence
4. it does have suggestion about the argument. But not counter-argument or concession.
5. Yes, But in 2nd and 3rd paragraph, it contradicts itself. in the price of product. artists won't be motivated with lower money, but you are saying it should be lowered. it contradicts itself.
6. Yes it does restates thesis statement. I think taking topic into broader context or prediction is not in the conclusion.
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201300058 Kang yoonhae
In these days, through a website such as torrent, people can freely share movies and music. However, this is an illegal behavior as they don't pay for owning those movies and music. In my opinion, people who copies intellectual properties must be considered as a thief. This is because it damages supplier's finance and lowers motivation of producers and possibilities of intellectual gap can be tolerated by differently adjusting prices, which is an important assertion of opposite site can be tolerated by differently adjusting prices.
To begin with, illegally copying intellectual product directly damages financial means of the producer. As physical workers earn money by selling their physical products, intellectual producers also have rights to get proper benefit of producing. For example, farmers sell crops and earn money. If a person illegally takes crops and spread them to other people, this behavior is considered as burglary. In other words, copying and spreading intellectual property can be translated into stealing one's financial products.
Furthermore, intellectual suppliers will lose their motivation if they cannot get proper prices for their work. To advance quality of a society's culture, developing intellectual products is essential. Movies, novels, music are all included in intellectual properties. For example, if a movie is copied and spread the profit of producing a movie will be decreased. The movie producers will be less motivated if their masterpiece is not properly estimated. They naturally got an impression of the audiences consider the movie as not worth enough to go theaters. This will relate to of thinking the movie producer's outcome is not respected by the society. After they are de-motivated, they will give less effort to make incredible movies and this will bring depression of movie industries and cultures.
Last but not least, intellectual gaps followed by capital status can be overcame by adjusting prices flexibly. One of the biggest reason of against intellectual property is it will elevate intellectual gaps among societies. As people have to buy products such as movies and music, the poor cannot enjoy them as they don't have enough capitol. However, prices everyone can afford proper cost of the product by flexibly managing. To be specific, children and students who don't have an financial ability can enjoy intellectual products in relatively low prices. However, adults especially who earn lots of money will have to pay higher costs.
Intellectual property must be respected by society. Not just for proper payment of workers' effort but also for social benefits, illegally copying and spreading of products must be eliminated. In addition, everyone will have enjoyment and benefits of product by flexibly adjusting costs of products. Therefore, I strongly believe that copying one's intellectual property must be considered as stealing and we have to stop this circumstance.
Intellectual property, it is really necessary
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201300058 Kang Yoonhae
In these days, through a website such as torrent, people can freely share movies and music. However, this is an illegal behavior as they don't pay for having those movies and music. In my opinion, people who copies intellectual properties must be considered as a thief. This is because it damages supplier's finance and lowers motivation of producers. In addition, possibilities of intellectual gap which is an important assertion of opposite site can be tolerated by differently adjusting prices.
To begin with, illegally copying intellectual product directly damages financial means of the producer. Physical workers earn money by selling their physical products. For intellectual workers, they make living through selling their intellectual products which means intellectual producers also have rights to get proper benefit of producing. For example, farmers sell crops and earn money. If a person illegally takes crops and spread them to other people, this behavior is considered as burglary. In other words, copying and spreading intellectual property can be translated into stealing one's financial products.
Furthermore, intellectual suppliers will lose their motivation if they cannot get proper prices for their work. People lose their motivation when there are no proper responses for their efforts. However, to advance quality of our culture, developing intellectual products is essential, which means giving motivations to intellectual workers is crucial for our society’s cultural advance. Movies, novels, music are all included in intellectual property. For example, if a movie is copied and spread the profit of producing a movie will be decreased. The movie producers will be less motivated if their masterpiece is not properly estimated. They naturally got an impression of the audiences consider the movie as not worth enough to go theater. This will relate to of thinking the movie producer's outcome is not respected by the society. After they are de-motivated, they will give less effort to make incredible movies and this will bring depression of movie industries and cultures.
Last but not least, the worries of intellectual gaps followed by capital status can be overcome by adjusting prices flexibly. One of the biggest reason of against intellectual property is it will elevate intellectual gaps among societies. As people have to buy products such as movies and music, the poor cannot enjoy them as they don't have enough capitol. However, by flexibly managing prices everyone can afford proper cost of the product. To be specific, children and students who don't have a financial ability can enjoy intellectual products in relatively low prices. However, adults especially who earn lots of money will have to pay higher costs. By giving prices individually, intellectual workers can have chance to have rewards for their efforts without snatching chances of the low financial abilities to enjoy intellectual products.
Intellectual property must be respected by society. Not just for proper payment of workers' effort but also for social benefits, illegally copying and spreading of products must be eliminated. In addition, by flexibly adjusting costs of products everyone will have enjoyment and benefits of product. Therefore, I strongly believe that copying one's intellectual property must be considered as stealing and we have to stop this circumstance.